Please critique my poem?

I want to buy you little green shoes for your little green feet,
Alien man.
I love you but your feat do really smell.

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Daniel got so bored
he didn't know what to do
so he keyed his way to Yahoo
and tapped a line or two.
It wasn't very interesting
or really very fun
but when he had submitted
he knew that he was done.